Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past,which reduces their activity levels accordingly.why is this the case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

Today, children watch
television
more and it is significantly increased than the past.
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An
unfortunately
this
lead to reduce their
activity
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an analytic or interpretive literary composition
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I will explain the causes and suggestions to rise up the level of children's
activity
. Many causes lead to increase hours of watching
television
among children. The
first
important one technology like the satellites and size and type of
television
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There are multiple kids
television
channels and these channels open twenty four hours
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Also
the kids have a lot of selection like songs
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dance, different cartoon character and
program
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the program
programs
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Each channel
try
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tries
to attract the kids to watch more. The televisions are available in public area like restaurants and even in medical clinic.
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The second reason
is working
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with
both parents
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so the
time
of spending with
sibling
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a sibling
siblings
is reduced and caring is dropped as compared to the past. To solve
this
problem
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parents should detect
time
for watching
television
during the day and not allowing to increase than one hour.
and
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And
try to select the channel. They will like activities if we try to diminish
time
for seeing cartoons etc.
mother
a woman who has given birth to a child (also used as a term of address to your mother)
Mother
or father should go with siblings in outdoor
activity
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playing with their children and encourage them to play in beaches and participate in
sport team like
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a team sport like
a sport team like
football or tennis
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If children won in
activity
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parent
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parents
a parent
the parent
can give rewards
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This
issue
lead
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leads
has led
to motive children more to jump and play or paint. Their community can make
champion
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a champion
of practical skills between school age or preschool age like painting
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playing music
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acting drama or playing tennis ball.
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conclusion, I feel the way of
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spending
time
of our kid is responsibly of their
famil
a social unit living together
family
families
familiar
,
then
the community and they can both. Help the children to take
activity
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action
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