Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past,which reduces their activity levels accordingly.why is this the case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

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Today, children watch

television

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more and it is significantly increased than the past.

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unfortunately

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lead to reduce their

activity

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. In

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assay

an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

I will explain the causes and suggestions to rise up the level of children's

activity

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. Many causes lead to increase hours of watching

television

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among children. The

first

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important one technology like the satellites and size and type of

television

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There are multiple kids

television

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channels and these channels open twenty four hours

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the kids have a lot of selection like songs

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dance, different cartoon character and

program

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the program

programs

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Each channel

try

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tries

to attract the kids to watch more. The televisions are available in public area like restaurants and even in medical clinic.

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Second reason

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The second reason

is working

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with

both parents

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so the

time

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of spending with

sibling

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a sibling

siblings

is reduced and caring is dropped as compared to the past. To solve

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problem

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parents should detect

time

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for watching

television

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during the day and not allowing to increase than one hour.

and

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And

try to select the channel. They will like activities if we try to diminish

time

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for seeing cartoons etc.

mother

a woman who has given birth to a child (also used as a term of address to your mother)

Mother

or father should go with siblings in outdoor

activity

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playing with their children and encourage them to play in beaches and participate in

sport team like

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a team sport like

a sport team like

football or tennis

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If children won in

activity

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parent

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parents

a parent

the parent

can give rewards

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This

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issue

lead

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leads

has led

to motive children more to jump and play or paint. Their community can make

champion

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a champion

of practical skills between school age or preschool age like painting

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playing music

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acting drama or playing tennis ball.

IIn

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conclusion, I feel the way of

spend

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spending

time

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of our kid is responsibly of their

famil

a social unit living together

family

families

familiar

then

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the community and they can both. Help the children to take

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activity

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action

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

299 words

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digital platforms
on-demand streaming services
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urban environments
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Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past,which reduces their activity levels accordingly.why is this the case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people like to work in small companies or businesses while others prefer working for large companies or government organizations. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for a large company or organization?

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause? What can be done to solve these problems?

Some people think secondary school students and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical courses leading to careers such as carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?