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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many people argue that the growth of convenience foods has assisted them to be at the same pace as the modern lifestyle. In my opinion,
although
 there are few benefits of it
such
 as it requires less preparation
time
 and is a low-cost
food
, the drawbacks that it has a more detrimental effect on our health outweighs the advantages. One of the main pros of convenience foods is that it is extremely quick to prepare, requiring no
long
Suggestion
longer
lengthy
 pre-preparation steps,
for instance
, marination of the meat or resting the dough.
In other words
, the
food
, in the big factories, is prepared in
such
 a manner that it is almost ready to eat and simply requires to be either fried or heated in some cases.
For example
, ready to eat pasta needs to be added to warm water and stirred for a few minutes, before it ready to be consumed, helping people save
time
 in cooking
food
 so that they can dedicate their
time
 in other chores. The
second
 major benefit is that it has a
low-cost value
Accept comma addition
low-cost, value
, which makes it an ideal modern-day
food
. Since the
food
 is prepared in big factories in huge amounts, it is comparatively cheaper than
food
Suggestion
the food
 available in restaurants.
For instance
, ready to eat pasta may cost almost one-
third
 of what it may cost in a restaurant. Another benefit is that it can be preserved for a longer period.
However
, these preservatives have a negative effect on our health, making it not advisable to be consumed regularly. In conclusion, despite being cheap and requiring less preparation
time
, the convenience
food
 contains harmful preservatives,
thus
 I believe the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages.

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