In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with thier grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

In
this
modernized world, it has been observed that grandparents are resisted to
spent
Suggestion
spend
quality time with their grandchildren. According to my perception, it has several negative impacts on a child.
This
essay will discuss grounds behind my opinion and justifications in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are several reasons for the above mentioned situation. The
first
and the foremost one is, it may lead many children on a wrong path. To be more specific, staying away from family and especially spending very rare good time with grandfather/mother will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the life of
youngones
Suggestion
young ones
. They will tend to adopt bad habits
such
as smoking, consuming alcohol and tobacco.
Consequently
,
this
may result in many severe diseases. To illustrate, more than 50% of hostel students are found to be suffering from
dangerous illness
Suggestion
a dangerous illness
due to intake of alcohol
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
drugs.
Furthermore
, despite being apart from their
gaurdians
a person who cares for persons or property
guardians
gardens
garden
,
grandbabies
lack behind in gaining cultural values as well as family traditions. To elaborate, at an early age children
are shifted
Suggestion
is shifted
to
hostel
Suggestion
the hostel
for their better education.
Hence they
Accept comma addition
Hence, they
are unaware about their culture and resist themselves to follow the traditional values and
ocassionally
now and then or here and there
occasionally
if they attend any family function, they find themselves as
a
Suggestion
an
alien
their
in or at that place
there
they're
. To give an example,
anoe
used of a single unit or thing; not two or more
one
of my
cousin
Suggestion
cousins
named Dhruvi is staying in Canada since seven years and attended the marriage of her friend and felt very alone. To conclude,
this
essay discussed the outcomes of aforementioned situation. In my opinion, being a grandchild of my family, it is mandatory to spend some quality time with grandparents, it is due to the fact that they have
abundance
Suggestion
an abundance
of knowledge related to culture.
Submitted by raina110199 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: