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International air fares are falling and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity?

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International air fares are falling. More and more employers are offering holiday entitlements. Needless to say, the number of people who travel to exotic holiday destinations across the world is on the rise. While
this
 trend has both upsides and downsides, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The
tourism
 industry has witnessed tremendous growth over the
last
 few years. And it looks like it will continue
this
 upward trend. The growth in the
tourism
 sector has many advantages. In many parts of the world
tourism
 has created more jobs than any other industry.
Tourism
 helps countries to earn valuable foreign exchange.
Tourism
 has
also
 helped in the preservation of many heritage structures and art forms which would,
otherwise
, have died without leaving a trace.
For example
, many ethnic Indian dance forms would have died if they hadn’t received the patronage of foreign tourists.
Tourism
also
 promotes cultural understanding. As people travel to other countries, they get an opportunity to learn about other cultures and beliefs. Intercultural understanding is always good for global harmony. On the flip side,
tourism
 has some disadvantages too. In many countries, particularly those in the
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 world,
tourism
 has led to the establishment of some morally questionable practices.
For example
, many tourist hotspots in Asia and Latin America are now synonymous with prostitution and illegal gambling. Tourist hotspots are
also
 plagued by problems like theft, maimed begging and drug abuse.
However
, these disadvantages are nothing compared to the advantages and it doesn’t take a lot of efforts to see that
tourism
 has more benefits than drawbacks. To conclude, the growth in the
tourism
 sector does have some downsides;
however
, the negatives pale in comparison to the positives because
tourism
 creates jobs and promotes understanding between people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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