the table shows information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries
This
table shows how much Linking Words
people
spend on frequently consumed and used stuff in the year Use synonyms
of
2002. the study Change preposition
apply
conducted
in five different countries, which are Add a missing verb
was conducted
Iraland
,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey.
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Ireland
Overall
, Most Linking Words
people
in these countries pay more money Use synonyms
on
food, drinks and smoking in which Turkey is Change preposition
for
on
the top of the list. Change preposition
at
However
Linking Words
turkish
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Turkish
people
Use synonyms
also
are among the highest society who Linking Words
considerablly
spend on education and leisure activities. Italian are Correct your spelling
considerably
considerable
more keen
to spend on clothing and shoes.
First of all, Turkish Replace the words
keener
people
pay around 32.14% of their annual Use synonyms
budget
for cooking and smoking followed by Use synonyms
Irish
who spend 28.91%. Correct article usage
the Irish
While
the rest of the Linking Words
countires
spend Correct your spelling
countries
comparable
amount of their Add an article
a comparable
budget
which is around 18%.
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secondly
, clothing with Linking Words
foot wear
expenses took about 9% of the annual Correct your spelling
footwear
budget
of Italy. the other four countries pay between 5.4% to 6.6%.
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lastlt
but not Correct your spelling
lastly
last
the
least, the Correct article usage
apply
overall
expenditure of Linking Words
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the turkish
turkish
annual Change the capitalization
Turkish
budget
on education and fun activities, reach 4.35% which is the highest among Use synonyms
other
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others
in contrast
to Linking Words
spain
which spent only 1.9%.Change the capitalization
Spain
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