the table shows information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries

the table shows information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries
This
table shows how much
people
spend on frequently consumed and used stuff in the year
of
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2002. the study
conducted
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in five different countries, which are
Iraland
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Ireland
,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey.
Overall
, Most
people
in these countries pay more money
on
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food, drinks and smoking in which Turkey is
on
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the top of the list.
However
turkish
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people
also
are among the highest society who
considerablly
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considerably
considerable
spend on education and leisure activities. Italian are
more keen
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to spend on clothing and shoes. First of all, Turkish
people
pay around 32.14% of their annual
budget
for cooking and smoking followed by
Irish
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the Irish
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who spend 28.91%.
While
the rest of the
countires
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countries
spend
comparable
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amount of their
budget
which is around 18%.
secondly
, clothing with
foot wear
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footwear
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expenses took about 9% of the annual
budget
of Italy. the other four countries pay between 5.4% to 6.6%.
lastlt
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lastly
last
but not
the
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least, the
overall
expenditure of
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the turkish
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turkish
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Turkish
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annual
budget
on education and fun activities, reach 4.35% which is the highest among
other
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others
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in contrast
to
spain
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Spain
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which spent only 1.9%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, budget with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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