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Many people claim that massive investment in technology for space exploration is a wastage of money. Do you agree or disagree?

The huge expenditure incurred on researches related to the earth's surroundings is constantly put
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a number
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 there are many benefits due to which the above investment can be easily justified. There are myriad merits of investment in technology for
space
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exploration
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but one pivotal benefit is that with the advancement of technology scientists can forecast the upcoming weather
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 By weather forecasting scientists can predict upcoming natural calamities. Another benefit is that by increasing population, the earth has become ailing planet,
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, most of the scientists make researches on other planets for alternative homes.
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many research agencies like NASA and ISRO researches on the Moon and Mars for better living conditions for human life.
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space
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exploration
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also
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 creates lots of job opportunities. Because these types of works need a variety of workers like skilled and professional workers
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 researchers, engineers
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 technicians etc. As a ramification of various job opportunities, the economic level of the country
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 boost. Citing a survey by BBC
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 which revealed that almost 35% of employment in India was created by
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exploration
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 agencies like ISRO.
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, scientists
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 seek a variety of other resources on other planets
such
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 as helium, sodium and so on. The scientists of NASA explain that these resources are available in huge quantity and have a better quality than the earth. To conclude, no doubt,
space
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exploration
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 offers many benefits
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 but
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the welfare
 of the human race should be the priority of government. So the required amount of money should be allocated to every sector of human development.

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