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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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We live in a world where dangerous activity grows by the day.
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 has now become problematic for the law abiding citizens. While there are many ways to reduce
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 incidents, some believe the best method of action at curbing
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 would be the imprisonment of the offenders. In my opinion prison should be the
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 resort, as there are many other ways to reduce criminal activity. Imprisonment for some offences can be detrimental.
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, being sent off to a prison will have a negative effect on someones social status for life
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, enabling the others,
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 as friends, family members or the even the local community to re-brand the offender and to categorize them as a criminal, even if the offence is minor.
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, in many countries, driving under the influence is considered to be a crime and will be penalised under the criminal law.
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 will have a negative impact on the offender, as now they will be in the system and be categorized as a criminal.
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,
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 will
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 impact their future and commit more crime. Since nowadays almost all employers run a background check before hiring a candidate, they may never be able to find work again,
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 making the offender to shift towards performing more crime in order to make a living.
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, sending a perpetrator to a rehabilitation centre or perform community work would make them understand and teach a valuable lesson rather than a permanent black spot on their life. Less serious crimes should be given a different punishment rather than
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 time. Critics in favour of
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 time point out that offenders with serious crimes
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 as repeated sex offenders, sex traffickers, serial killers should be given imprisonment for life or even capital punishment which is true
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, I would argue that that less serious offenders may get the motivation and skills required from high-level criminals to make more serious crimes when thrown into
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 as, in many locations prisons are shared between the two categories due to capacity issues. Which will increase more criminals rather than reducing. In conclusion, sentencing to
jail
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 can tarnish someones social status and their future career growth.
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, low-level offenders should be given an alternative punishment rather than mixing them with other high-level offenders.

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