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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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It is observed that most of the items
such
 as food, electronic devices and so on that we purchase are invented in other nations. While it helps to develop international business with those countries, I believe that it results in the devastation of local traders. The main advantage of buying other
country
's
product
 is that it enhances the trade with an international organisation. By
this
 way, the economy of the
country
 will improve which helps the people to get a quality
product
.
For example
, most of the electronic items
such
 as smart phone, tab, iPad are made in another
country
 provides quality products and bought by most of the people. Despite
this
, I believe that the price of the item cannot be afforded by all the people and it may not worth for people in privileged status. As for the drawbacks are concerned, the predominant disadvantage is that it impacts the local businessperson.
That is
 to say that they cannot compete with an international organisation.
Also
, people tend to buy the
product
 based on the brand rather than local
product
 and
hence
 it will lead them to shut down their work.
For instance
, in India, most of the small scale and large scale business are closed due to the low sales of their products in the local market.
However
, in my opinion, it may lead to loss the job for more workers working for their own land and
hence
 people should buy native items. In conclusion,
although
 buying different nations
product
 aid the
country
 to have worldwide trade by providing quality
product
, it affects the inhabitants work by closing their business and
hence
 people should get the products that are made in their homeland.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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