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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that transportation is mandatory for everyone. As per
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estimate
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estimated
 29
millions
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million
vehicales
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
 on British roads by the end of 2000. In my
openion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
, I
am tottly agree
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totally agree
am totally agree
 towards
different type
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different types
a different type
 of
transporatation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 and it should be considered important part and
rectriction
a principle that limits the extent of something
restriction
 rules must be for car owners.
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discribe
give a description of
describe
 it in details. On one hand, 29 million cars will lead air pollution.
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 is because burning fuel leads carbon di-oxide in
envionment
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the environment
environment
 and it
leads dangerous
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leads to dangerous
 illnesses like breathing problem, eyes redness and
headach
something or someone that causes anxiety; a source of unhappiness
headache
headaches
head-ache
.In contract, If we
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control, on
control on
contol of
contol of of
contol for
patrol
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the patrol
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the other hand
, I
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
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into
picuture
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the picture
picture
 and should have
law
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a law
laws
 to control car
ownershitp
the relation of an owner to the thing possessed; possession with the right to transfer possession to others
ownership
 for its
use
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user
. It is important because it will save us from global warming and
reason
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the reason
 behind it is cars
fuem
a giver or sender
from
film
fun
.
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, there are some cars which are operated by solar system battery and helping in
reduce
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reduced
reducing
 pollution. In the end, if we do not go alternatives and do not control on car's increment, it will lead towards natural
elimities
violent or severe weather (viewed as caused by the action of the four elements)
elements
 as flood, earth quack etc. In conclusion, Car's are damaging the environment
balance but
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balance, but
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mine
of me or myself
my
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opinion, if
opinion if
opinions if
opening if
 we move towards the alternate transportation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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