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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays,
violence
 on technology increasing while some people consider that
violence
 on
television
 and in
computer
 games has damaged the
society
, others mention that the positives of it as well as the beneficial importance for the public behaviour. In my opinion, I completely agree that attack played the vital role in destroying the
society
 from the helps of the
television
 as well as the
computer
 games. On one hand, people believe that
violence
 on
television
 and in
computer
 games modified the mind of people to the negativity and I agree with
this
.
In other words
, people learn the negativity act from the
television
 and in
computer
 games.
As a result
,
this
 act applied to the
society
 and create serious problems in the relation with others in
society
.
For example
, my cousin Faruk who is only nine years old attacked his neighbour with a knife and cut his one finger recently, Faruk accept that he learns
this
 negativity from the game which one he played all the time on the
computer
.
However
,
violence
 in technology can damage any happier
society
 easily.
On the other hand
, a few people mention that
violence
 on
television
 and in
computer
 games deliver the positive impacts on people's behaviour by build thought of the necessity of the
society
. While people learn the importances of
society
 from the
television
,
also
 from the
computer
 games.
For instance
, ''
Society
 in life'' named tv serial influenced my relative Akash who was always disrespectful to the people of his
society
.
Although
, learning positivity from the
television
 and from the
computer
 games are important. In conclusion,
violence
 on
television
 and in
computer
 games has damaged the
society
 by producing the negative acts while influencing the importance of
society
. While the people's opinions vary, but I personally agree that
violence
 on
television
 and in
computer
 games has damaged the
society
 by some bad acts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • desensitize
  • empathetic response
  • aggressive behavior
  • formative years
  • impressionable
  • catharsis
  • media psychology
  • mixed results
  • family environment
  • genetics
  • regulatory bodies
  • rating systems
  • vulnerable demographics
  • inappropriate content
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