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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

#zoo #purpose
Many species of plants and animals have died out over the
last
 few decades due to human activity and climate change. Most of the time, climate change leading to the extinction of wildlife is
also
 a result of human activity; yet, humans are not doing much to save these flora and fauna. The main reason for
this
 indifferent attitude is the lack of understanding of the way the ecosystem works. Creating awareness is the only solution. Humans are not doing anything to save wildlife because they are under the impression that the universe is created for them. They believe that other forms of
life
 were created to benefit them.
Consequently
, they do not see any reason to protect them. They kill them for food and to satisfy their greed.
For example
, animals like tigers and crocodiles are killed for their skin. Elephants are killed for their tusks. Animals are
also
 used in medical research and
this
 causes permanent damage to them; yet, humans
do not find
Suggestion
have not found
 anything morally wrong about
this
 practice. Most people seem to be under the notion that if they are
rich they
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rich, they
 can live comfortably on
this
 planet even after all the plants and animals have died. Unfortunately, they do not realize that any disruption
to
Suggestion
of
in
 the food chain will threaten their very existence. Creating awareness is the need of the hour. People should be sensitized about the damage they are doing to themselves by abusing wildlife. Right from primary school, children should be taught to respect and conserve all forms of
life
. Until we realize that we are threatening our own existence by allowing other forms of
life
 to die we will have no motivation to act. In conclusion, human beings are not doing anything to save other forms of
life
 because they do not see any value in it. Creating awareness is the only way to nudge them to act.
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