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Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my gratitude for the initiative your company has taken to reward people for their philanthropic work and brought positivity into
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society. I am Luca, a member of
local
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 city council and
resident
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 of Bangalore. I saw an ad
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newspaper
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 about the community service award and I would like to recommend one of
my
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 residents of my society for
this
 award who has contributed immensely to make the community a better place. Mr Albert, a retired government officer, has been operating an NGO for the poor women's in the society whose parents could not afford their tuition fees. With
this
initiative
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 many of the young girls are able to fulfil their dreams of educations and pursue their passion. Currently, many of these young girls are working in big organizations, school teachers and owners of regional businesses. Due to his sheer
determination
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 he had been awarded so many awards
such
 as
Grammy
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 award,
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an accolade
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accolade
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 from local and global administration. I was wondering if your newspaper would publish an article and a trophy with
printed
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 name for his service to the community.
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, what can be so inspiring when someone's actions motivate hundreds of others to make the world a better place to live in. I look forward to hearing from you soon and once again thank you for your Time and initiative. your faithfully, Luca

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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