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Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In over to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behaviors. Do you agree or disagree.

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These days, it seems that a large number of people are migrating to other countries than previous decades.
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 has become questionable for immigrants to follow migrated nations rituals and lifestyle.
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 some people disagree, whereas I completely agree that it is the responsibility of immigrants to adopt rules, regulations and behaviours of the new
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. In my assertion, there are two primary reasons for
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, It is vital that newcomers observe the laws of their adopted
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 for the sake of social order. One good example of
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 is road rules, imagine that if people refused to drive on the same side of the road. It is,
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, necessary for all-immigrants to ensure that they observe the law in their new
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, regardless of any differences to laws in their home
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.
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, and most importantly, though, in order to maintain social cohesion it is essential that newcomers respect the social norms of their adopted
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. Of course, having a mixture of various cultures and traditions gives a
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 colour and vibrant;
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 I would contend that too much cultural diversity undermines a society by alienating people from each other/ It is my belief that similarities unite people, whereas differences have a tendency to divide. A strong society is homogenous society with shared values and goals. By way of conclusion, I believe that the issue is likely to become even more important in future as border between countries become increasingly blurred. It,
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