You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter give details of the camera and where you bought it - Canon G60 Pro black with some other accessories, Yorkdale mall explain what has happened - This camera was meant to my daily driver to take photos and after reaching and opening I discovered that charging cable, spare battries as well as stand is missing from the box say what you want him/her to do about it - want to contact local shop here in the London and ask them to provide me with either a new camera kit or missing components.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope that you are doing well. The purpose of
this
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letter is to notify you about my recent purchase of a camera
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your company. First and foremost, the model of the device is Canon G60 Pro, The DHRU edition and I bought it from the Yorkdale Mall located in North York.
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the product, I
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purchased a few
addtional
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additional
accessories to enhance the experience, like two additional
batteries
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packs, a charging cord
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a
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stand.
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, as
this
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device was meant to be my daily driver for my trip to the London city in the UK, I did not
unboxed
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it until I reached
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my
desination
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destination
. And that's when I discovered that all my extras
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not in the box,
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not only I
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the box but
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my suitcase so find anything, but I could not find them.
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, I would like to request
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an immediate
deliver
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of all the missing items to me or else arrange it from
local
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dealer. I hope that you understand my
frustation
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frustration
and arrange all the parts for me. Sincerely, Ruchin Patel
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task achievement
Clarify the specific items missing from the box and provide more context to your request.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a smooth flow between introduction and body paragraphs for better coherence.
task achievement
You clearly mentioned the camera model and where it was purchased.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing statements are appropriate.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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