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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping.Is this a positive or negative development?

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Recently increasing
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Recently, increasing
 number of shopping centres or malls are taking place of small local shops and
thus
 becoming the
first
 choice of the customers which is a positive vibe in my opinion. If we make a comparison between these two kinds of enterprises, we can see the
first
 key point which is product availability. In small local shops you will find a limited number of products which are exposed to customers
on the other hand
, you will find a huge range of products in different shops or sometimes in
one
 single shop which will enable your options to buy the best
one
. Another key point for
this
 comparison is
time
 saving. If you go to 10 different shops in different locations to source 10 separate items or products, it is relatively
time
 consuming option rather than find all in
one
 location or sometimes all in
one
 super shop. Branded items are not always available in small local shops which are quite
getable
 in large malls. Customers will find a variety of quality in large shopping centres rather than
one
 single small display of a shop situated in the community.
Last
 key point, creating differences between local shops and large shopping centres is the mode of
payment
. Most of the
payment
 counters of large shopping centres are friendly with any mode of
payment
 like debit or credit cards, PayPal and other popular
payment
 systems whereas small shops mostly accept cash as
payment
. Nowadays, most people don’t keep that much money as hand cash and they usually feel comfortable to pay in digital mode. Nowadays people are getting more
time
 conscious and
thus
 getting interested to go for
time
 saving options in their daily life purchases. Wide range of choices in
one
 single frame will definitely attract any customers. So
this
 changing trend is doing well at present context.
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