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Many nowadays prefer online education to face to face education. Do you consider this a positive or a negative development?

#education #face #development
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TODAY'S WORLD IS BECOMING MORE AND MORE ADVANCED DUE TO THE TECHNOLOGY UPGRADE.
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, PLETHORA OF FOLKS CHOOSE TO HAVE ONLINE CLASSES RATHER THAN ATTANDING TRADITIONAL SCHOOL.
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 ESSAY WILL BELIEVE THAT THE E- LEARNIG HAS IT'S BOTH ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES. FISRTLY,
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 ESSSAY WILL DISCUSS IT'S MAJOR ADVANTAGE AND
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, WHAT ARE THE DISADVANTAGES OF ONLINE LEARNING
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 OF TRADITIONAL SCHOOL. ON THE ONE HAND, THE PRIME PROS OF E-LEARNING IS THAT IT IS COVENIENT AS PER THE PERSON PREFFERENCE
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, INDIVIDUAL CAN ATTEND CLASSESS WHENEVER HE/SHE HAS TIME EVEN DURING TRAVELING IF AN INDIVIDUAL IS COMFORTABLE. AS A ARESULT, PEOPLE CAN SAVE MORE TIME FOR OTHER ESSENTIAL CHORES
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, THEIR PRODUCTIVITY WOULD BE INCREASED.
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, AS PER THE UK TEENAGERS SURVEY REVEALED THAT 90% OF THE UK YOUTH CHOOSE TO LEARN THROUGH THE INTERNET BECAISE THEY FOUND IT MORE EASY AND CONFORTABLE.
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, IT DOES HAS DEVASTATING IMPACTS
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 AS, WELNESS ISSUES, LACK OF SCOCIALIZATION AN SO ON.
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 IS BECAUSE, PEOPLE RARELY GO OUT SIDE AND
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 MIGHT AFFECT THEIR HEALTH BY LESS PHYSICAL EXERCISE.
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 RESULT IN THE INTROVERT NATURE AND I THINK IT IS NOT WORTH F BEIMG SO IN
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 FAST PACE WORLD.
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, THE DEVELOPED COUNTRY'S HEALTH DATA SHOWN THAT 80% FOLKS ARE HAVING SOME TYPE OF ILLNESS,
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 AS OBESIY, DEPRESSION AND MANY MORE.
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 BECAUSE SITTING AT ONE PLACE. HOWEVEVR, IF INDIVIDUALS USE
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 AS PER THEIR REQUIREMENT THAN SURELY THE THE NEGATIVE IMPACT COULD BE DECLINED. IN CONCLUSION, ONLINE LEARNING FACILOTY INDEED HAS MORE PROS THAN CONS BUT ONE SHOULD NEVER IGNORE ITS DETRIMENTAL EFFECT ON THE HEALTH.
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, HELATH IS WEALTH.
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