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It is believed by the people that the health will be worse in the future compared with today despite the development of technology.

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In today’s world,
rapid growth
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the rapid growth
 of
technology
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 is affecting every aspect of our
lives whether
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lives, whether
 it be personal or professional. Many people think that
health
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 will only worsen in
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future even
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the future, even
the future even
 after
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 advancements in
technology
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. I am in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of
this
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 statement because
technology
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have
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has
 its own demerits
such
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 as the harmful radiations from electronic devices, addiction and over reliance on
technology
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etcetera
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. To start
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with, my
 reasons,
technology
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 connects the world and for
such
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 connections it requires improved network to send and receive data.
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, more the devices get connected more they leave radiations which impacts our
health
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 directly. New York Times, one of the most reputed news and magazine service, published a survey result which shows 70% of the participants of the survey were effected from the mobile radiations. In
future
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,
this
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 trend is only going to grow and resultantly the
health
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 of people will deteriorate.
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, it is not just the harmful
radiations but
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radiations, but
 over dependence on
technology
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also
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 going to impact our
health
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 negatively.
For example
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, when we have
google search facility
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a google search facility
the google search facility
 which provides us any information we want, we do no try to remember anything as we highly rely on google, which leads to weak memory. With
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 high reliance on
technology
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 people will be more lethargic in
future
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 and prone to diseases
such
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 as obesity and hypertension. In conclusion,
technology
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 is making our life
easier but
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easier, but
 at the same time giving us
health
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 issues which will only grow in
future
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. I will recommend limited use of
technology
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 that too with proper statutory warnings to make people aware of the
health
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 issues they might face because of that specific
technology
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.

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