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In some countries, unemployment is high, therefore some people think children should study only primary education and not secondary education because they cannot find jobs in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Education plays an important role in defining your career.
Therefore
, it is very important to concentrate on study from the young age. I completely disagree with the fact that education is not required after grade school.
Firstly
, it is necessary to have qualified certificates in order to get a desired job. Because of huge competition within the market, it has become very difficult to get shortlisted for a position.
For Example
: if you want to be a Police officer, primary learning won't fulfil the criteria of the offer. There are only a few jobs left that demand only elementary school, like Helper, Stuard, Cleaner, etc.
Therefore
, the more educated you are, more successful you will be.
Secondly
, You will be respected if you hold good degrees in hand. People around you will value your suggestions and guidances. You will
also
 be valued for your knowledge at work place.
For example
: If you are an Accountant,
first
 of all you should have enough understanding and skill of Accountancy. And if you are an expert in your field
this
 can open gates for various attractive perks and promotions. Being educated not only will make you wealthy, but
also
 get you a social status. In conclusion, it is a myth that jobs will be vanished from the market over the period of time.
Therefore
, I urge people to give good learning facilities to their children. They should not be pressurised for jobs. I recommend for good certification as it attracts a handsome salary and Job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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