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Some people believe that factories and private tour operators should bear the cost of cleaning up environmental pollution, instead of the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Responsibility
Suggestion
The responsibility
 of protecting the
environment
 from the pollution is controversial. Some people claim it is the duty of the factories and private tour operators,
instead
 of the government. It is partly agreed because, government assistance is
also
 essential to clean up the
environment
. Companies being the major contributors
for
Suggestion
to
 environmental pollution must be cautious while dumping unwanted waste and package tour visitors litter all around the city and beaches thereby polluting the
environment
.
Firstly
, many of the manufacturing industries do not monitor the hazardous waste released into the
environment
.
Although
, they even pollute the air by releasing gases like carbon dioxide.
Moreover
, they must monitor the levels of these toxic substances before being released into the
environment
. A recent survey by Harvard university reveals that, ozone depletion is mainly due to the pollution caused by factories.
Therefore
, government must impose certain stringent laws against these companies, which do not follow the global standards the levels of pollutants that can be safely dumped into the
environment
.
Secondly
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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