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Some say that Technology has made food surplus. Others say it has made food harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to
technology
 in relation to
food
production
. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine
this
 question from both points of view and
then
 give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of
technology
 in
food
production
 considerably outweighs its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
 is that with the advancement of
technology
 processing and packaging
food
 has become a seamless process. It is
also
 possible to say that with the advent of agricultural machines for land cultivation, the standard of
food
 produced has increased tremendously. One good example of
this
 is the
Sumal
limited or below average in number or quantity or magnitude or extent
small
food
 factory in Kuala Lumpur where a thousand bags of beans are produced daily.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact consuming technologically produced
food
 is dangerous to the health of the consumer. People often have
this
 opinion because they feel that processed
food
 tend to lose more than 80 percent of its nutrients in comparison to fresh farm produce naturally cultivated and consumed. A
second
 point is that due the use of machineries for the
production
 and processing of
food
 the unemployment is at an all-time high as workers are being replaced with machines. A particularly good example is the mass
lay off
the act of laying off an employee or a work force
layoff
 of 1000 workers from Landu farms in 2018, these workers complained about being replaced with machines. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that
technology
 has and will always be a blessing to mankind in the area of
food
production
.
This
 is because more people are being fed and are able to afford these commodities due to the reduced sale prices.
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