Nowadays countries are reducing the cost of air travel as compared to the past. While some argue this will result in a negative outcome, others believe it will be positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Use relevant examples.
Recently, nations are trimming down the expenditure
of
aviation as compared to the ancient days. Change preposition
on
Although
,
many disagree that the effect will Remove the comma
apply
resolve
in a negative ending, others are optimistic. In my opinion, I agree with the school of thought that reduction of Verb problem
result
air
transportation fares will bring about a constructive result. This
essay will discuss the reasons why people
have varying views with regards
to shrinking Fix the agreement mistake
regard
air
travel cost
.
There are a number of rationales why some Fix the agreement mistake
costs
people
think that to reduce
the charge of flight Change the verb form
reducing
fee
will yield Fix the agreement mistake
fees
unconstructive
chain reaction. One Correct article usage
an unconstructive
of
Change preposition
apply
such
ground will be the hike in taxes and delay
in flights. Correct subject-verb agreement
delays
This
is due to
the fact that low priced
tickets will attract hidden charges Add a hyphen
low-priced
such
as insurance and tax to supplement for
the shortage. The result of Change preposition
apply
this
is to cover for
baggage loss, Change preposition
apply
in-flight
Correct word choice
and in-flight
meal
among others and the flip side of it is that the ticket would not be exchanged Fix the agreement mistake
meals
neither
rescheduled. Correct word choice
or
For instance
, one of Nigeria’s airlines called
Ibom Verb problem
apply
Air
offer
cheap fares, Change the verb form
offers
however
, this
class of e-ticket has clauses that are not amendable and become useless if not used at the stipulated date. Another point they put forward on why affordable plane fare will be negatively impactful is,
excessive delay in the Remove the comma
apply
airplane
schedule and upsurge of aeroplane fuel consumption as more planes will be lifted up at every interval.
Change the spelling
aeroplane
On the other hand
, some of the populace which
I belong to consider that lower airfare will be productive based on certain Correct pronoun usage
apply
cause
. One Fix the agreement mistake
causes
of
Change preposition
apply
such
basis is that the society will experience tremendous growth in their economy. In other words
, a discounted airline ticket means more tourist visitation and ultimately, it will promote cultural exchange and mutual understanding between citizens. Undoubtedly, the travelers
will need accommodation and food, it can be observed that hotels and restaurants will benefit from Change the spelling
travellers
this
increase as well as
the market sellers to other mean
of transportation locally. Change the wording
another mean
other means
For example
, Cross River state in Nigeria is known to celebrate a yearly festival and it attracts a large number of people
. Both international and local airlines take advantage of this
period to offer low-priced tickets which is beneficial to the average people
and to the economical
development of other businesses. Replace the word
economic
In addition
, proper planning should be put in place to combat any downside that may occur like providing sufficient serviced planes.
In conclusion, while
people
may vary in their opinion, I believe that, although
, countries reducing the air
transport price will be beneficial to the economy. Certain views should be considered when planning and more as discussed above.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to the task, adequately addressing both views and giving your opinion. However, ensure that each paragraph is clearly focused and that ideas within paragraphs are closely related to each other.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is logically organized and flows well, though some points could be more clearly articulated. Using transitional phrases more effectively would enhance the flow between ideas.
coherence cohesion
To further enhance clarity and coherence, consider subdividing longer sentences into shorter, more manageable ones. This can help avoid potential confusion and ensure clear delivery of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, both of which effectively summarize the main points and present a clear thesis statement.
task achievement
You've successfully integrated relevant examples that strengthen your arguments, making your points more concrete and relatable.
task achievement
The main points are generally well-supported and the essay demonstrates good overall understanding of the topic.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.