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The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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Nowadays, it is a common fact that many people don't eat their meals with their families. There could be several reasons for
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 trend and some influences. Recently people prefer eating their meals without their families because they have heavier workloads and hectic schedules. They are more convenient to eat with their colleagues at a restaurant nearby the workplace. So, they have more
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 for work. Todays, technology causes lifestyle and
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 habit to change and eating fast
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 is more common everywhere and every
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.
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, teenagers and young people prefer to eat fast
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 with their friends
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 of eating traditional
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 at home with their families.
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 trend has both negative and positive impact on people. As a positive impact, people can be much more flexible with their
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. When they haven't a fixed-
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 for eating meals, they can eat whatever and wherever they want. By doing so, they can manage their
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 effectively and it causes their stress to reduce. There are several negative impacts which the most important of them is weakening the family relationship.
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 can lead to a weaker family Bond because members of a family lose their opportunity to see each other and have a conversation. If a person can't talk with his/her family members for sharing his/her feelings and beliefs, she/he feels lonely. As a consequence, people feel isolated and are more
vulnerable especially
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vulnerable, especially
 when they enter society.
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 conclusion, todays people eat their meals with their families less than ever before. There may be several reasons for
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 trend
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 as changing lifestyles and lack of
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. While people can manage their
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 by doing so,
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, it makes communication between family members week.

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