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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people mke? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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These days technology takes an important place in our daily life. Indeed, people interact together through their mobile phone.
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, the new generation,
particularly become
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particularly becomes
 unsociable. In my opinion,
this
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 is a negative development in certain ways. People prefer to send messages
instead
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 of talking face to face. When, they need an information or just have some news of their family or friends. They prefer to send them a message on
social network
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social networks
a social network
the social network
.
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, the professor Testart from the CNRS wrote an article where he explains that even if they live under the same roof. They prefer to send
message
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messages
 than knocking at the door. I believe that in a few years people will only interact with each other through their cutting-edge devices.
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, people prefer to use
application
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the application
 to make new relationships. A few years ago, people met their friends in bars and a party, whereas nowadays they prefer to chat online thanks to
dating site
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the dating site
a dating site
. So, everything is doing virtually and in some case, they do not even know the person they are talking to.
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, they prefer to encounter a person only after the software proved that they have the same affinity.
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, I am sure that people have more difficulty to talk with others when they are with a group of friends. In conclusion, since a few years technology has changed our way to communicate with each other.
This
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affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
, a lot our relationships. For
this
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reasons
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reason
, people prefer to interact together through social media and make new friends thanks to dating applications.
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