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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is often argued that these
days
Suggestion
day
 humans have more alternatives than previous years. I completely agree with
this
 opinion and think that today there are plenty of opportunities for us.
First
 of all, I want to say that living in the internet century brings to our life huge advantages,
such
 as online sites. Even if someone wants to buy clothes without going out home, it is near us only one click.
As a result
 not wasting time getting something gives pleasure and
feeling
Suggestion
a feeling
 of satisfaction.
For instance
, nowadays 60 % of people buying items from the internet
instead
 of spending hours on traffic or shopping centres.
That is
 why it is more important to learn how to use web pages properly.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 lots of choices on the educational side. Everyone can study whenever and wherever not depends on age or financial problems. There are several options for studying while anybody has not got time or money for going to the course.
For example
, Ibrahim Tatli, a famous Turkish singer who is 60 years old now, said that he lived in a village and did not go to school as financial problems.
Then
 he began to study distance learning for about 40 years. To summarise, if someone wants to learn something, it is never late, if there is a chance. In conclusion, I strongly believe that now there are numerous possibilities in our daily life that making our living better in education and shopping parts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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