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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extend do you agree or disagree with these statements?

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The Internet has made the world smaller by helping people connect instantly where ever they live, but the same technological marvel has
also
 been accused of making people addicted, forcing them to spend more time alone in front of it rather than being with their friends.
This
 essay will argue why
this
 technology will continue to benefit the human race while successfully negotiating negative aspects associated with it. Internet helps people to keep up their relationship even if they live continents apart. The speed and ease with which, it connects people using various modes including chat, audio and videos are the reasons behind
this
.
Moreover
, various social networking sites help people to regain their school and college day friends who once they thought was lost forever.
For instance
, it is being reported that, social network site like Facebook has helped almost 80% of its users to find many of their classmates through its data base which gives a clear indication of the critical role played by web on retaining relationships around the globe.
On the other hand
,
this
 invention has been accused of making some people abstain from socializing due to their addiction with certain websites. Though, the number of people getting trapped like
this
 is definitely a negligible minority their count was increasing in the initial stages of internet era, before the intervention of the concerned authority. Instances of many young people getting cheated by virtual friends that they befriend, while spending too much time on social sites without cross checking their identity have been a prime example of
this
.
However
, awareness program initiated by governments is really helping to bring down these kind of incidents to a large extend.
This
 essay argued that the latest technological achievement which made our life so colourful with friends and relatives so close though stays so far, is here to stay with minor hiccups being dealt with successfully. And for the people, no matter which corner of
this
 universe, they live temporarily or permanently, is very well aware of the fact that, it would be impossible for them to go back in time to live in an isolated era devoid of
this
 all critical connectivity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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