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The best way to solve world's environmental problems is by increasing the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#world #cost #fuel
Solving the world's environmental problem is by increasing the
fuel
 rate is debatable. Some people claim that
this
 is the best way. I completely disagree with
this
 statement because there are other ways like using electric driven vehicles and by encouraging people to walk or use cycle
instead
 of cars or motorbikes.
However
, increasing the
fuel
 rate is not a permanent solution to solve environmental issues.
Firstly
, using electric vehicles which are
ecofriendly
 will tackle our environmental
pollution
 issues.
In addition
, they do not burn
fuels
Suggestion
fuel
 or release toxic substances to the atmosphere.
Moreover
, these vehicles run on battery charging and they are quite reasonable.
Further
, they reduce sound
pollution
 as they have soundproof engines.
For instance
, Japan has shown a remarkable drop in the levels of environmental
pollution
 after the introduction of these electric vehicles.
Therefore
, these
ecofriendly
 vehicles can solve the environmental issues as they do not burn the
fuel
.
Secondly
, by encouraging people to walk or cycling can help in resolving environmental issues. Walking or cycling will not only give health
benefits but
Accept comma addition
benefits, but
 will
also
 be of a great way to protect
environment
Suggestion
the environment
.
Moreover
, by walking to work places everyone will have individual satisfaction in their contribution to the environmental issues.
Further
, government must
also
 reward all those who go to work places by walking or cycling.
For example
, I got perks as a token of appreciation from my CEO as I go by walk to my office often. In conclusion, unfortunately, hiking the
fuel
 rate may not be of use in solving environmental issues to a large extent.
Therefore
, using electric cars or by walking or cycling seems to be a
permanant
continuing or enduring without marked change in status or condition or place
permanent
 solution to the global environmental problem of
pollution
.
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