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You are planning a week-long vacation and you need someone to take care of your house while you are away. Write a letter to your neighbor and tell them that you are going away. In your letter, you should: ask them to take care of your house explain why you will be away.

#vacation #someone #care #house #neighbor
Dear Adam, I hope
this
 letter finds you in
a
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good health. I am writing
this
 letter to seek your help, my parents are visiting me after 5 years.
Hence
, I have been planning to go on
one week
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vaccation
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vacation
 and spend some quality time with them. I have planned a tour to Vancouver
due to
 which my little cat would be alone in the house. I would be obliged if you could help me to take care of my house and kitty. As I am new to
this
neighborhood
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, I do not know anyone well, you are my
last
 hope. My guardians and I are going to catch up after 5 years and I have a lot to talk to them.
Furthermore
, I want to show them
beauty
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 of
this
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 country, where I reside. As we live in a small town and there is nothing suspicious to show them,
hence
, I planned a trip to British Columbia. I have already applied for the leave in my office. I would really appreciate your help. I will be waiting for your response. Yours loving, Johan Jony.
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task achievement
Be more specific about the tasks you want your neighbor to do (e.g., feeding the cat, checking the mail).
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in tense usage to make your writing clearer (e.g., changing "have been planning" to "am planning").
coherence cohesion
Ending paragraphs with a concluding sentence can help enhance coherence.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is friendly and appropriate for a request to a neighbor.
coherence cohesion
Opening and closing statements are well executed and polite.
task achievement
The letter fully addresses the task, explaining the reason for the absence clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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