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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays, human life easier because of technological improvement. Some
technology
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 found
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in
 better communication, but some people think these kinds of inventions impact social interaction between people.
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 communication can be easier with
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technology
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, I think,
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that's
 a bad impact on people's interaction in their social life. There are so many reasons for people became less interactive because of technical evaluation.
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 and foremost, there are so many social sites available in which people are more interested in their likes and comments. People have been
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fonder
most fond
 of social media because of their appealing features.
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, most of the people wish birthdays of others on their social media rather than meet them personally. People might not feel bored with the usage of social media because of features so that they not interested to face to face conversations.
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, technological platforms, which are famous for their society related reviews, allowed people to share their
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. Some youngsters wanted to give an
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,
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 they cannot give it because of some circumstances. To specify, some parents are strict who
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is not taking
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 child reviews as a serious note, so that some children share their views on social sites. To illustrate, most youngsters update their real-life situations rather than share with their parents.
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, some flexibility in technological innovation became people to less interactive. To conclude, more evolution of
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 helpful in life while, these inventions impact social
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conversations
. In my
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, the feature of
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 and no restriction in
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 on any topic, both are the main reasons for making people less communicative.

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