While on a business trip in another city, you met an old friend who lives there. You are going on another business trip to this city soon and would like to see him/her again. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - tell him/her about your trip; - say why you were happy to see him/her; - suggest an arrangement for you to meet.

Dear Maninder, I hope
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letter finds you in
best
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of
your
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spirits and health. I am writing to tell you that I will be on a
week long
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business trip to your home city New York next month. My boss has asked me to meet a client of
our's
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in New York. I still
had
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the
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vivid memories of our
last
meet, when we
accidently
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encountered each other in a coffee shop in Delhi
few
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months ago. It was great catching up with you after so many years because it is always delightful to meet old mates and relive all the memories of the past days. I always
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enjoyed talking to you even in
the
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college days
also
but our
last
meeting was even more special as it happened after so many years.
Nonetheless
, I
was having
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a
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thought that during my visit to New York
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would be great, if you
can
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spare some time out of your schedule. We can meet for
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dinner or
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lunch,
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you like as I would probably be free by noon. I will send my travel details through email to you in advance. I am looking forward to hearing from you on
this
. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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grammar
There are a few minor grammatical errors, such as "an old mates" which should be "an old mate" and the phrase "boss asked me to meet a client of our's" should be "boss asked me to meet one of our clients".
style
Consider varying sentence beginnings to enhance readability. For example, instead of starting multiple sentences with 'I,' try to rephrase for variety.
task achievement
The letter includes all key parts of the prompt: details about the trip, an expression of happiness to see the friend, and a suggestion for a future meeting.
style
The tone is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend, showcasing a personal connection.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are well-structured and focused on single ideas, which makes the letter easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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