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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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One
 of the most important
problem
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problems
 in the 21st Century is Global warming. With the constant rise in
sea
levels it
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levels, it
 is becoming the biggest threat to humans. In
this
 essay I would like to discuss the problems associated with rising
sea
 levels and provide possible solutions to it. The main problem with rising
sea
 levels are floods. Floods have a devastating impact on the areas and are difficult to detect in advance.
For example
, when
floods
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the floods
 occurred in Thailand in the year 2000 the loss of life is beyond numbers.
Also
, the property
is loss is
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loss is
 expected around 10 billion
dollars which
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dollars, which
 is a great deal for small countries
such
 as Thailand.
Also
, it will have
drastic impact
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a drastic impact
 on the
nations
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nation's
 economy since the amount of
time which
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time, which
 will be taken to rebuild the infrastructure and to place people
at
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in
right places
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the right places
 will be many years.
One
 of the solution to the above problem is to be prepared. As it is difficult to predict these type of calamities,
one
 must be ready for the aftermath.
Japanese government
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The Japanese government
 has put set of guidelines for its people to follow during these type of situations.
One
 of the guidelines is to evacuate the areas which are bound to affect. The evacuation takes place when there is a rise in
sea
-level above certain points.
Secondly
, the affected areas are isolated for
certain period
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a certain period
 of time since the land becomes infertile and there might be a spread of diseases. There are several solutions put in place
by
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in
 different countries depending upon their geographical region and population.
One
 most adapt to recover. In summary rising
sea
 levels due to global warming will definitely have major impact all across the world. In the modern era of technology, detecting the rising levels and taking appropriate measures will certainly reduce the loss of life and property.

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