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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At present, Our planet
sever
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severs
 from several
crisis
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crises
 which bother the environment peace. Some nations are mentioning
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 that the raising of fossil
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fuel's
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fuel
 expenses may contribute in minimizing the harmful
affective
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affects
affect
 on the environment. I totally disagree
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 opinion because I think there are diversity resources of
energy
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 should be considered to
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
 the ecology rather than increasing
fuel
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 price. Currently, Many different countries witness the large increasing in temperature degree which called (global warming) and considering that as the most critical
climate's
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climate
 change in the
last
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 20 years. Most of media channels point a finger to the extremes of using black
energy
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 in our daily activities which leading to the climatic warming.
Also
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destruction
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the destruction
 of marine biology
as a result
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 of
fuel
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 ships' waste overseas is one of the worst resultant of misuse the non-renewable
energy
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.
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, There are many alternatives could be used
in stead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of fossil
fuel
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such
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 as electricity and solar
energy
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 which have their clean influence on the ecology.
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Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, The official governments of
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developing
 countries which rating as the highest
fuel
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 consumption in the world
are raising
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is raising
 the
puplic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 awareness of the importance of replacing the ordinary
fuel
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 with a sustainable
energy
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 resources because of their good impact on both of environment and economy. To conclude, The peace which we
aims
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aim
 to have for our planet condition is the significant
globally
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global
 concern. By reducing the daily amount of harmful
energy
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 and replacing with renewable resources will contribute directly to resolve the most bad affect on the
climatic
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climate
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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