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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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We are in the globalisation with the internet networks, people can exchange data to other people
in
Suggestion
at
 anytime and anywhere by just uploading it for less than a minute. If they decide to
share
 the
information
 for free or charge the money, they need to consider how
this
 will impact on their data, or their organisations carefully. People who decide to
share
 it for free understand the returning in advantages of the new discoveries. They need a
further
 discussing on the
information
 that cannot find any solution.
For example
, the research of Parkinson disease still cannot know how to cruel the patient.
However
, in the future, with
the better
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the best
 knowledge and technology that developed by somebody might
finally
 find the way to give the treatment for the patient.
Accordingly
, sharing useful
information
 in scientific research to other researchers, university students, or knowledge people for free is bringing a wonderful outcome to lots of people.
However
, one of
drawbacks
Suggestion
the drawbacks
 of sharing everything is that the data they published might bring more cost to the companies. In some cases, sharing secret
information
, the organisations may get less profit in their businesses. For instant, the minute of board
committee including
Accept comma addition
committee, including
 the price quotation of the vary suppliers. If suppliers know how much price that others offer to sell to their
customer
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customers
, the customer may need to pay with higher prices than they should pay. In the conclusion, sharing
information
 to other people need to decide between the pros and the cons of how the impact would be on their organisations. I strongly agree to
share
 as much as
information
 in scientific research and academic world while the
information
 in business should be careful to
share
.

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