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Many people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and develop health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough time to exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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In present days, the majority of people can not get enough
time
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 for doing
exercise
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 in their daily
life
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 for many reasons like too busy with their work and unhealthy
life
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 return to them. In
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 essay. I will discuss about the factors of
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 issue and provide solutions. Nowadays, it is clear to see that the money, career achievement and the wealthy are essential to people living more than the healthy
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.
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 or all, the huge amount of people think that they need to spend
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 on their work to fulfil their career goal and get successful so they are tending to do overtime working like more than 10-12 hours per day,
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 when they return to homes they always feel too tired to do
exercise
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 or lazy to go gym even on their work day off. Secondarily, some people will think it is wasting
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 to do the workout because
exercise
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 can not show the healthy results as fast as they already thought to these reasons many people give up so easily and leads them to permanent an unhealthy
life
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. In my opinions, it is essential to make the society be realized to an importance of
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 for having a healthy
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 and there are many ways to solutions
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 as government should advertising to encourage people do workout at least few times every week and make media to make people aware of the drawbacks of an unhealthy
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. Future more, the companies should provide their employees the fitness facilities or give the staffs discount coupons or gym membership to support people to
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 as well. In conclusion, Many people has lack of
time
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 for do
exercise
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 and have an unhealthy
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 because their busy working lifestyle, to resolve
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 problem we have to give them good knowledges of benefits from
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 and
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 they will tend to do more workout to improve their health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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