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There are many extinct animals’ species in the world. Some people think we should protect animals from dying out, while others believe we should spend more time on problems of human beings. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The rate of extinction is now greater than at almost any point in history and
this
 is important not just for the
species
 that are dying out, but
also
 impacts humans. The loss of
species
 not only reduces the understanding,
diversity
 and beauty of the
planet
, but
also
 has the potential to create an unstable ecological environment.
In addition
, there is no reason environmental problems cannot be addressed alongside other human problems. In
this
 essay the importance of protecting animal
species
 will be discussed. It is important to protect animal and plant
species
 from dying out due to human activity as their loss means that the genetic history of that
species
 will be lost along with the opportunity to study and understand the world better.
In addition
, the world would be a far less interesting and beautiful place without the many now endangered
species
such
 as giant pandas, tigers and polar bears. Of even greater concern is that the loss of
species
 creates the risk of creating an ecological environment
that is
 unstable, with a small number of
species
 dominating the
planet
 as they become free from predators leading to an
environment
Suggestion
Environment
 that lacks genetic
diversity
 and becomes vulnerable to diseases or natural disasters.
In addition
, the lack of
diversity
 could slow the recovery from
such
 disasters.
Although
, there are many other human problems in the world to be
solved including
Accept comma addition
solved, including
, poverty, political instability, wars and pollution, people should not ignore environmental issues. It is possible for societies to attempt to address many problems simultaneously and all issues that threaten the long-term stability of the
planet
 should be addressed urgently. In summary, maintaining the
diversity
 of the
planet
 is critical for human survival and should be dealt with along with many other important problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extinction, Endangered species, Conservation, Habitat, Ecosystem, Biodiversity, Ethical responsibility, Preservation, Ecosystem services, Wildlife protection, Poverty alleviation, Healthcare, Climate action, Resource allocation, Food security, Interconnectedness, Sustainable development
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