In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?

In some parts of the world, intense problems because of the student behaviour is seen in the schools which it's causes and solutions discussed as follows. Nowadays, parents work a lot and actually, they do not have enough
time
to be at home
next
to their children to learn them how to behave in the different situations, especially in strict ones.
This
leads to bringing up a child with a lot of behaviour problems, which is shown when he goes to school, and especially when he shall make a proper decision in his communications, but he can't which could cause acute problems between students and
also
between principal and students, and these problems could continue and extend to the society if do not solve.
Moreover
, today, children could access rough games, films and videos through internet easily. Seeing these kinds of videos and
also
playing
such
kinds of games has negative and
also
destructive impact on our children’s behaviours, because they learn fighting and
also
imitate their speech easily, which get them to the trouble in the school. One solution for solving
this
problem is that, parents should manage their
time
efficiently so that they can be more at home spending
time
with their children. They
also
should try to be a friend with them and speak with them regularly.
This
speaking help them to feel more safety and
also
help them to say their problems and wants their parents to suggest them some solutions which lead to learn to behave as well as possible they can. Another solution is that, on one hand, parents shall supervise what games their children play and
also
what film or video they watch when they are in their room and
on the other hand
, their accessibility to the inappropriate sites shall be restricted, and they are not allowed to buy whatever they like,
instead
parents could guide them to buy exciting and appropriate films and games so that they could enjoy their leisure
time
next
to learning proper behaviour. In conclusion, I believe that, two explanations for
this
problem could be our children's parents who work a lot and
also
their easy access to the internet, which shall be restricted and be under their parents supervision.
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  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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