In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?

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In some parts of the world, intense problems because of the student behaviour is seen in the schools which it's causes and solutions discussed as follows. Nowadays, parents work a lot and actually, they do not have enough

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to their children to learn them how to behave in the different situations, especially in strict ones.

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leads to bringing up a child with a lot of behaviour problems, which is shown when he goes to school, and especially when he shall make a proper decision in his communications, but he can't which could cause acute problems between students and

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between principal and students, and these problems could continue and extend to the society if do not solve.

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, today, children could access rough games, films and videos through internet easily. Seeing these kinds of videos and

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playing

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kinds of games has negative and

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destructive impact on our children’s behaviours, because they learn fighting and

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imitate their speech easily, which get them to the trouble in the school. One solution for solving

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problem is that, parents should manage their

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efficiently so that they can be more at home spending

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with their children. They

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should try to be a friend with them and speak with them regularly.

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speaking help them to feel more safety and

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help them to say their problems and wants their parents to suggest them some solutions which lead to learn to behave as well as possible they can. Another solution is that, on one hand, parents shall supervise what games their children play and

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what film or video they watch when they are in their room and

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, their accessibility to the inappropriate sites shall be restricted, and they are not allowed to buy whatever they like,

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parents could guide them to buy exciting and appropriate films and games so that they could enjoy their leisure

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to learning proper behaviour. In conclusion, I believe that, two explanations for

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problem could be our children's parents who work a lot and

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their easy access to the internet, which shall be restricted and be under their parents supervision.

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

parental guidance
discipline
moral guidance
social media
detrimental
bullying
peer pressure
overcrowded
disengagement
disruptive behavior
behavioral policies
code of conduct
parental involvement
social and emotional learning (SEL)
empathy
responsible decisions

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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?

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Parents are putting a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development? (24/02/2024)

Some people think that the government should invest money in arts and cultural events, while others believe that the government should spend money on more important things. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Topic: Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation» To what extent do you agree or disagree?