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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - say how important New Year is to people in your country - describe how New Year is celebrated in your country - explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Lee,
Last
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 South Korea. I am writing
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 email to share my information about it. First of all, New Year is a significantly important
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 in my country. I am not sure exactly what the reason is.
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, it is an official anniversary
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 of South Korea and everyone is waiting for
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day
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. On
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day
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, all the companies and facilities stop their work. Most Koreans celebrate
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day
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 with their parents
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 wearing traditional clothes, which are called Hanbok.
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, we usually eat Ddukkuk which is a
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 traditional Korean food. Eating Ddukkuk is a kind of ceremony that symbolizes gaining one year
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 age. Some people go to the East Sea to watch the first sunrise. It is the most crowded time in the cities along the East Sea. Recently, many people plan vacations for
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 and visit other countries
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 as Japan and various Southern Asian countries. That’s all the information I have for now. If you want to ask any
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 questions about
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, feel free to contact me. Yours Sincerely, Minwoo Chun

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task achievement
Consider expanding on why New Year is important in your country. Adding specific cultural, historical, or social reasons could enhance the depth of your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clear and distinct paragraphs for each main point (importance of New Year, how it is celebrated, and what you like about it). This will improve readability and structure.
task achievement
The letter responds to all parts of the task and provides sufficient details about the New Year celebration in Korea, covering its importance, how it is celebrated, and personal preferences.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, and each main point is discussed in a reasonable sequence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately friendly and match the tone of the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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