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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns .while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree?

#trees #environment #people #area #cities #towns #facilities
It is fact that trees
plays
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play
 an essential role to save the environment
.
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.
some
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Some
 people argue that trees should be grown in the unoccupied
space
 of
urban area
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the urban area
urban areas
.
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.
additionally some
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Additionally, some
Additionally some
thinks
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think
 that it would better
to develop
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develop
 housing and associated facilities in these
space
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spaces
.
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.
I agree that planting
tree
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trees
 will be
benfits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 in
serval
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Serval
several
 way.
However due
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However, due
 to
increasing
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the increasing
 of the population housing is
also
 necessary. There are
serval
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 reasons for using
city
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the city space
space
 for trees.
Firstly
,
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,
trees produce
oxgyen which
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oxygen, which
oxygen which
 fights against heavy pollution in cities and create a better quality of air by absorbing all pollutant gas (nitrogen oxide
,
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,
ammonia
,
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,
and ozone
)
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)
and filter them on their leaves and barks
.
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.
secondly
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Secondly
 trees cool the streets and
city
.
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.
for
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For
 instance average temperature in Los Angeles's have risen 6degree
farenheit
German physicist who invented the mercury thermometer and developed the scale of temperature that bears his name (1686-1736)
Fahrenheit
 in the
last
 50 year. As the
trees
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tree
 coverage has declined and the number of heat absorbing roads and buildings has increased
.
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.
tree
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Tree
cool
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cools
 the
city
 by up to 10 degree
farenheit
German physicist who invented the mercury thermometer and developed the scale of temperature that bears his name (1686-1736)
Fahrenheit
 by shading our home and streets
,
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,
breaking up urban 'heat island 'and releasing water vapour
into
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in
 air through their lives.
On the other hand
,
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,
without more housing a
city
 is unable to grow and develop which is essential in
world
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a world
the world
 with an increasing population.
Nonetheless I
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Nonetheless, I
 maintain my belief that urban
develop
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development
develops
 and environment protection can go hand in hand. In conclusion, I firmly think development of building houses do not mean to cut down trees to save the
space
. While planting more trees is sustainable and can long lasting to protect our environment.

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