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Both poor and rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree.

#accessibility #university
Everyone has the right to education. When it comes to higher studies only a few will go for it. Some people say that those with financially sound students can get college admissions easily, whereas some people believes that it depends on the ability to study. In my opinion, those who are highly talented and ability can access the academy without any difficulties. Nowadays, it is true that to get admission in colleges is difficult. The foremost reason behind
this
 is most of all, students applying for it are well talented, so the cutoff mark will higher.
Therefore
, people are ready to pay massive amount a fee to get a seat for higher education.
For instance
, some people go for management and NRI quotas with large amount of payment as admission fee. So to some extend those are financially sound can access the university easily than those do not have.
However
, the students those are highly talented will get the opportunity for graduation or higher level is comparatively higher than those mentioned above.
This
 is because the criteria for selecting pupils depends on the entrance exam.
For example
, entrance test like medical entrance, marks and rank list is used by many medical colleges to filter their
next
 batch. In spite of
this
, the percentage of applicants with great intelligence can access university more easily. To illustrate, Some people believe that the university education is only possible to those with high finance whereas other thinks that it is difficult to both poor and rich. But in my point of view, it is mostly depends on the talent and capability of students applying not their finance or culture.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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