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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Humans across history are increasingly suffering from wars and planet destruction. The advent of nuclear
power
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 made life safer and provided
cheaper and environment
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a cheaper and environment
the cheaper and environment
-friendly energy sources.
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 essay will discuss why I strongly agree with
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 opinion because nuclear
power
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 is a major player in our war against global warming and financial inflation. The use of oil as the ultimate source of energy destroyed our environment. Industries and cars across the
world
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 release billions of
liters
a metric unit of capacity, formerly defined as the volume of one kilogram of pure water under standard conditions; now equal to 1,000 cubic centimeters (or approximately 1.75 pints)
litres
 of harmful gases that damage the ozone layer, pollute our air and lead to catastrophic consequences on humanity by worsening global warming.
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, in a crowded city like New York, people always use face-masks to filter the air they breathe due to the smoky clouds of harmful gases.
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, immediate action is needed to get new legislation to use the alternative cost-effective and
healthier nuclear
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the healthier nuclear power
power
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. The acquisition of nuclear
power
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 among powerful nations, with no
dought
the state of being unsure of something
doubt
thought
dough
, had led to a safer
world
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.
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 is because when many strong nations have their own nuclear weapons,
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 will greatly limit the possibilities of a direct war between these countries as both politicians and citizens understand well that by pressing a single button the whole country will suffer.
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, everyone should keep in mind the hard lesson during
world
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 war two when the USA destroyed two Japanese cities within hours by a nuclear bomb. For
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 reason, having a nuclear weapon made life safer. In conclusion,
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 essay discussed why it is vital to rely on nuclear
power
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 to make our
world
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 healthier and our air cleaner as it will save us from the detrimental consequences of global warming and it will make us feel safer as thinking of the destroying effect of nuclear weapons will stop wars.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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