Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an argument that the type of
crime
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should be the only fact to establish a penalty.
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, part of society argues that facts
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as circumstances as well as motivation must be considered. From my perspective, in order to fairly judge someone, the justice system should consider several factors. On the one hand, regardless the motivation, crimes affect victims at the same matter, since the result of criminal
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any specific behavior
activities
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the same, as a consequence, they should be punished equally regarding the victim's protection.
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, even if an assault is
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
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by a minor, it still has the
potention
existing in possibility
potential
to hurt or kill the victim.
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, equal punishments help citizens to obey the laws, as individuals understand clearly their limits and consequences, which generally decreases
crime
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statistics.
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, ignoring other factors while judging a
crime
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is unfair, because the criminal might not be entirely
wrong nor
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wrong, nor
responsible for the action,
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, inmates could spend more time than they should in prison.
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, a man in Fortaleza spent twenty years in prison for killing his daughter's attacker, despite being a hard-worker and Christian, which lead to an unfair sentence.
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, dangerous criminals may be underestimated by the justice and commit illegal activities again, as most serial killers, to illustrate, have
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
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minor crimes before starting killing,
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, ignoring those aspects might increase
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numbers. To conclude, while
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fixing
penalties may seem more logical considering the results, the reasons and background of the action play a critical role to establish the level of dangerous of criminals. In my opinion, all judgments should take other aspects into consideration
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the
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