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The crime rates nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime.

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Owing to the technological innovations that aid in solving the
crime
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 quickly, in the recent days people are witnessing a drastic reduction in the incidence of
crime
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 compared to the past
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In my
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opinion, I
 agree with
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 view as
technology
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 helps in saving time by enabling the sharing of information about offenders and by helping to monitor crimes that are about to happen. There is no scepticism about the fact the recent advancements in the field of computer
technology
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 aids in the sharing of information at a rapid pace. What I mean is that digitalisation of the criminal records and other important data about crimes across the globe has enabled state authorities to track the offenders and maintain the law and order. To illustrate
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, Interpol is an international organisation that maintains digital data about international drug cartel and mafia
leaders which
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leaders, which
 enables every state to trace
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 criminals without difficulty and thereby take action with sufficient evidence.
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,
technology
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 certainly helps to prevent crimes that are about to happen. To be more precise, if people are aware of being monitored, not only will they obey the
rules but
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rules, but
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 refuse to get involved in
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 crimes. A good example of
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 is that the installation of speed cameras with continuous monitoring facilities has curtailed the traffic crimes dramatically across major cities in India.
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,
technology
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 helps to control
crime
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 by raising
awareness
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 among the public.
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,
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,
police personnel use mass media and the internet not only as an effective medium to
communicate but
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communicate, but
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 to raise
awareness
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 about
cybercriminals
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 and their style of doing fraudulent activities. A clear example of
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 is the effective
awareness
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 campaign about online hackers which resulted in a drop in complaints related to stealing of personal banking information. To sum
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up, in
 my opinion I strongly contend that technical inventions definitely have a supplementary role in curbing
crime
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 by raising
awareness
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 and monitoring.

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