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Some people feel unsafe when they are in public and at home. What are the possible causes of this and what are some possible solutions?

#people #home
In
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At
 some sort of circle and
home
,
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,
this
 is sometimes observed that few people
not feel
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don't feel
 safe
.
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.
 There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of causes which may vary person to person and can be resolved significantly. Some of them are discussed in following paragraphs.
Firstly
, someone's
loneliness
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lonely
nature maybe
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nature, maybe
nature may be
 the reason which
cause
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causes
deadly feeling
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the deadly feeling
a deadly feeling
 while whispering outward or at
home
 as he or she not fond of
such
 circumstances earlier. Another is the overwhelming crime
rate which
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rate, which
 cause institutions all the time of unsafe conditions in public or at
home
.
However
, there are possible solutions to tackle these
causes one
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causes, one
 of which is to stay within
group
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a group
groups
the group
 of
people whether
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people, whether
 at
home
 or in public as it will boost up your morale. Another preventive solution is to be physically and mentally fit through daily exercise, yoga, boxing, meditation. Remember emergency contacts of police, hospital, fire brigade
escetra
. To sum feeling unsafe is natural but there are numerous solutions to the causes of
this
 human nature feeling.
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