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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a belief that volunteer activities should be mandatory for all teenagers because it is beneficial for them as well as local communities. In my opinion, I agree that young people contributing to
society
is
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are
 a great idea but
this
 should not be compulsory. On the one hand, doing volunteer
work
 brings many advantages for teenagers and
society
. From the teenagers’ side, unpaid
work
 helps them grow both physically and mentally.
For example
, when teenagers take part in outdoor activities
such
 as planting trees or cleaning public spaces, they not only improve their health, but
also
 learn important skills like how to cooperate with others when performing duties, or how to handle conflicts in the team, etc. For local communities, if there are more young people dedicate their time to help, there would be more clean and beautiful spaces for the public, and a stronger connection among residents.
This
 would help
society
 become a
greater
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great
 place to live.
On the other hand
, I do not think that teenagers should be obliged to volunteer. In my opinion, volunteering itself is a meaningful activity, and the volunteers would benefit a lot from it when they do it from their heart.
However
, if young people are forced to spend their time on unpaid
work
, it may create resentment and the feeling of unfairness among them.
Furthermore
, under the influence of
this
 mood, I doubt that the results of volunteering do any good to
society
. In fact, the volunteers may not pay attention to what they are doing and do not care whether the results of their
work
 are qualified or not. In conclusion, teenagers may choose to
work
 for free and help others, but in my opinion we should not make
this
 compulsory.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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