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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, a person who has the materialistic possessions and a high profile background are considered more important than how his values or personality traits are. I moderately agree with
this
 viewpoint, as I believe a person's profile can make him powerful, but his inner values can only earn him respect. An individual's characteristics
such
 as honour, kindness and trust forms the basis of long term relationships; not only at present, but
also
 maintains respect after his death.
For example
, The Mother Teresa; she is well known not for her material wealth, but for her generosity and the value of human life. The fame and status may seem worthwhile at the moment until one possesses money and or a post. When
that is
 gone, no one will ever remember him. To exemplify, there are many
such
 politicians who once were the face of their region or nation,
however
 nobody remembers them at present.
Thus
, old fashioned values are essential to be alive in people's heart for a long time.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 true to say that people are attracted towards power and social status. No matter how well cultured one is
,
Accept space
,
he can merely achieve success in the present world, unless he has some connection with high profile people.
That is
 why, these persons with economic blessings and social status are considered as the very important personalities. They use money and power to achieve everything they desire, even get away with serious crimes.
For instance
, Nirmala rape case in Nepal, where the case could not move forwards, just because the accused was the son of some powerful politician. Undoubtedly, it is sad, even though it is a reality; a person's worth nowadays is judged according to his social position and property. In conclusion, I moderately believe that these days someone is considered important if he has huge possession and position; meanwhile, I think to earn respect, we still need a good personality.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Materialism
  • Social status
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honor
  • Kindness
  • Integrity
  • Consumerism
  • Superficiality
  • Ephemeral
  • Philanthropy
  • Prosperity
  • Altruism
  • Narcissism
  • Humility
  • Empathy
  • Ethics
  • Moral compass
  • Minimalist
  • Contentment
  • Material possessions
  • Status symbol
  • Wealth disparity
  • Moral bankruptcy
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