In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extent do you agree?

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It is a very serious problem that

crime

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rates is highly

increased specially

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increased, especially

increased especially

amoung

in the middle of

among

the young

genration

all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age

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generations

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some

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Some

of the crimes

occured

come to pass

occurred

in the

last

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decade are very

dangerious

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dangerous, such

dangerous such

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commiting

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

commuting

killing or serious injury

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consequently we

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Consequently, we

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need to have a

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clause

in the

crime

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law to deal with

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issue

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many

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Many

crimes which

leeds

a soft heavy toxic malleable metallic element; bluish white when freshly cut but tarnishes readily to dull grey

leads

led

lead

to serious

suffring

a state of acute pain

suffering

for the

victim

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victim's

family

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such

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as loss or a financial

troubles

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trouble

and at the end the criminal is just sentenced by one year in jail

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that is

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totally unfair and disappointing

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the

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The

crime

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law should be modified that any serious

crime

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comitted

bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude

committed

by any age group it should

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have

unified punishment

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refers to the speaker or writer

totally agree with that

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for the teenager if the

crime

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is minor or

dont

do not

don't

lead to a severe losses the law for the underage crimes can be applied

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Wed Jan 15 2020

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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4 paragraphs

146 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

juvenile delinquency
criminal behavior
rehabilitation
recidivism
adolescent development
retribution
impulse control
the justice system
societal influences
environmental factors
juvenile justice
punitive measures
adult incarceration
youth crime
reformative programs
deterrence
mitigating circumstances
restorative justice
correctional facilities
peer pressure

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In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world. in your opinion, should school be compulsory for all children, or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home?

The widespread of the Internet gives people more freedom to work and study at home instead of traveling to office and school. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Some people think that older employees contribute most to the success of a company. Others think that younger people play a more vital role. Discuss both views and disccuss your opinion.

With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?