Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The biggest concern in today’s world is

pollution

and environmental waste. As countries are progressing and become wealthier environmental problem are growing day by day which cannot be neglected. I totally agree with

statement

Suggestion

the statement

First

of all, in developing countries

pollution

is the main problem

for

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the atmosphere. To become richer state, country

depend

Suggestion

depends

on their industries which eventually create the industrial waste.

Moreover

, poor infrastructure

also

cause not only ecological but

also

effect

have an effect upon

affect

the healthy environment.

For instance

, a research is conducted by university of Mumbai, 60% of total environmental issues is created by industries which include

pollution

and other toxic waste.

Secondly

, the effect of

pollution

and environmental issue

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human health is so dangerous that it cannot be avoided. The smog atmosphere generated the

toxics

of or relating to or caused by a toxin or poison

toxic

air which

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the air, which

the air which

increase the diseases of lung and throat.

Moreover

, it not only

effect

have an effect upon

affect

humans but

Accept comma addition

humans, but

other species on

this

planet. In

last few years

Suggestion

the last few years

, we have seen that

large number

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a large number

large numbers

of dead

fishes

Suggestion

fish

are coming on shore of oceans around the world.

This

situations

Suggestion

situation

become

Suggestion

becomes

the eye opener for

decision maker

Suggestion

decision makers

the decision maker

of developing countries.

For example

, in mid 90s London face

the smoky

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the smoke

and fog weather which

effects

have an effect upon

affects

the health of senior citizen and children. Eventually,

this

weather cost many lives which makes the policy maker and

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

streak holder to think about

this

and takes major steps to dispose the industrial wastage as well the air

pollution

. To conclude

this

, we can only overcome the

pollution

and environmental is to create the eco-friendly environment.

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Prediction or recommendation

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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