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Developing countries require international organization’s help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many people believe that
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 whereas others take the opposite view and claims that developing nations need education, infrastructure
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, health care and
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 based
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 programs. While practical
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 and policy programs have their own merits I would argue that financial
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 plays an integral role in supporting poor countries. On the one hand,
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 based programs and strategic advice are extremely important for developing countries. One reason is that, practical
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 programs
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 as vaccination to prevent major diseases, developing medical and education centres and supporting structures are needed to resolve existing social problems.
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, thousands of vulnerable children in Africa have been saved by International
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 programs from agencies
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 as the International Cross Organization and Doctors Without Borders Organization provides
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 which has proven successful in rescuing the general population of these countries from disease and starvation. Another reason is that most national leaders have their own limited vision or knowledge of strategic
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. Expert Consultants from international groups could help them optimize and manage
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 policies for all programs.
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 would be a positive impact on all aspects of their country's programs. The result would lead the nation to future prosperity for their citizens.
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, I would argue that financial support from the international
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 plays a significant role for poor nations.
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, if the governments had enough money in their budgets, they could promote small businesses for people with a low interest loan. The result being, many people could make ends meet and stop the poverty cycle.
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, traffic infrastructure in poor countries could be improved by investing
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 money to build concrete roads, highways and bridges which could connect the remote areas to cities.
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, trading and travelling could help increase rural
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 and the economy.
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,
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 money could be used to improve the educational system so that universal education could be implemented. When children are educated and can use their knowledge, it helps develop much needed career prospects for the future. In conclusion,
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 and consultants are beneficial in some ways for developing countries, I believe that financial support is more beneficial for
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