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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.

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It is believed that unrevealed areas of the globe should be exposed for more resources to fulfil the need for
oil
 and gas.
This
 essay disagrees with the view that there isn't any necessity to open the unexposed area for Resources.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss the fact hat the importance of finding an alternative use of
oil
 and gas and
secondly
, discuss the consequences of these resources. In present day, the demand of the
oil
 and gas gradually rising that's why it's essential to use the areas of resource which are not searched yet. But it's really a great matter of concern that what will happen when those undiscovered resources will u
sed?
Suggestion
use
Therefore
, it's necessary to find out an alternative component of the
oil
 and gas.
For instance
, In New Zealand, they started solar energy as a substitute of electricity.
However
, the result of unleashing the area for resources will create a malign impact on the environment. Until now, for resources many trees were cut down, forests and jungle are turning into a desert, etc.
As a result
, greenhouse gas is gradually increasing, the rainfall is decreasing, many natural creatures are in the face of disappearance etc.If
this
 continues, one day the earth will end up as a dust.
For instance
, while Australia is a developed country, they are facing many natural disasters
Such
 as Tornado, Sidr and Flood etc. In conclusion, in the world of h
omogenization
Suggestion
homogenized
it's not impossible to find out an alternative way to keep our lives safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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