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You stayed at your friends’ house when you participated in a business seminar in Australia. You left a file with important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend, describing the file and ask him/her to return it to you by post.

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Dear John I am writing
this
 letter to inquire about the file I forget in my room while I was staying
in
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 your house.
Although
, after attending
business
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a business
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 seminar in
Sydney
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the Sydney
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 auditorium, I arrived late at home because it was almost 90 minutes drive from the auditorium and your house which make me very tired because
i
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 am not used to
for
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long drives. As
i
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 remember
i
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 keep my things on the side table
next
 to my bed.
Its
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red
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a red
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 colour file with my company logo on top of it and MOU agreement title
written
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 on it. Though,
Next
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 morning when
i
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 was leaving for the airport, I forget
it
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 put in my bag, which is very important because
this
 file
contain
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 official documents and MOU etc. I am requesting you to please send it as soon as possible to my postal address by urgent courier service. I will pay you all the courier expenses
to
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you
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.
Your
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 Faithful
Omair
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Email

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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