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Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt these days the age is playing a major role in our lives.
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, the question: Does the retired age important to be increased? Is considered one of the most controversial questions today. In
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 essay I am going to examine both the advantages and disadvantages before the final conclusion. On one side of the argument there are people who argued that the benefits considerably outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for believing that, if the people
work
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 longer they will get a
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 of full salary long
time
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 while if they loss their
job
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 earlier they will get half or a quarter of their salary.
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, nobody is thinking about the calm life after retardation, they are thinking from different aspects about how they could complete the same life with less income and different economic status. It is possible to say that those people are 100 percent, depending on their
job
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 and they do not have any activities or plan to
work
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 on it after they leave with no
job
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.
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, It is
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 possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often people argue that everybody wants
time
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 to relax from the
work
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 and get a plan to do something else. They often argued that because, after long
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 working most of the people have some money they did not touch it and
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 free
time
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 after they retired from their
job
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 are the
time
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 where they can start their own business. We have seen there are no easy answers for
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that to save money during these working years and always think about early retried as a good opportunity to start your own
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